Kiss In The Rain

Thanks for the review, Derek, and I will explain it all in chapter one, when i post it.

Hey, thanks guys for the crit. Like I said, I'm not normally a poet, I'm more of a fiction writer. I think this poem was supposed to be rather repetitive; ...

Yikes. Jinn is real tough, huh? I'm really excited for the next chapter! Fantastic. Truely fantastic.

This was really kind of sad, but it was beautifully written :). Your imagery is spectacular! Keep it going!

Well, It sounds interesting, to say the least. It is captivating, but I agree with Hannah. It goes a little fast. But, maybe that's your style. I'll look out for ...

Echolair, lol, this is just the prologue. I meant it to be vague. It's not supposed to make sense right away. Thanks for the reviews

Hey, thanks for the review! :). I liked the ending, too. It's pretty cool. About the foreshadowing... I don't think water will have anything to do with it, but I'll ...

:( Poor Fat Boy. His mom is a jerk. :(

What is with his mom?? The least she could do is confront Fat Boy about his weight instead of embarrasing him about it! Other than that, nice job, as always. ...

Awww, poor Fat Boy! I'm allergic to Penicillin; I couldn't imagine being allergic to mushrooms--- not that I like them myself, but I'm sure they are in a lot of ...

That last part should say "Thoughts". :S Sorry.

Oh, wow! This is really great. I like it a lot. :) I'll be waiting for more!

I don't care what anyone else says. I think this will be a promising book. Don't stop! :D :D :D Well thank you very much! :D :D :D

-Description- You really don't have any imagery at all. I don't know anything about how the characters settings or events look, feel or smell. I need to. It will make ...

Did you two do the eyeball avatars on purpose? Just curious... Yes, actually, we did. Though, he's quite the cheesbrain.... (lol, kidding)